July 13th, 2013, 10:40 am

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Can also be a very dangerous game when the disk takes off and flies across the room.
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Pedant (Guest) July 13th, 2013, 4:20 pm

That'd be "easily", in that sentence. Perhaps try "going" instead of "planning". And instead of "accompanying" you might try "walking" as a less formal alternative.

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Jops July 13th, 2013, 4:50 pm

@Pedant:
Thanks for the feedback. I made the fixes.
I deliberately left "accompanying" as it is, however. I want that line to sound rather formal, in fact.

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One does not simply place an easy puck...

Vertous July 13th, 2013, 11:36 pm

Game on player 1!

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The_Hankerchief August 2nd, 2013, 11:49 am

Air Hockey is serious business, yo